{"id":302,"date":"2008-11-01T18:19:00","date_gmt":"2008-11-01T18:19:00","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/occamstypewriter.org\/vwxynot\/2008\/11\/01\/book-review-coils-of-the-serpent\/"},"modified":"2008-11-01T18:19:00","modified_gmt":"2008-11-01T18:19:00","slug":"book-review-coils-of-the-serpent","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/occamstypewriter.org\/vwxynot\/2008\/11\/01\/book-review-coils-of-the-serpent\/","title":{"rendered":"Book Review: Coils of the Serpent"},"content":{"rendered":"
I came across this book through a rather unusual channel – the author, Raymond Clark Lutz, emailed me after reading one of my blog posts and deciding that I reminded him of one of the characters in his new novel<\/a>. I gathered from his first message that he’d been Googling for blogs with certain key words – DNA, viruses, creationism etc.<\/p>\n

My reply was as follows:
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“Hi, thanks for getting in touch! I’m not sure yet if I buy that I remind you of a character in your book, but it was a good enough sales pitch to take me to your website, and the excerpt looked good, so it’s now on order at Amazon! It’s not in stock apparently so it might take a while. I’ll put the review up on my blog when I’ve read it.<\/span><\/span><\/div>\n

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Congratulations on publishing your novel, and good for you for your very nicely targeted marketing campaign! (I used to work in marketing myself and recognise good targeting when I see it).<\/span><\/div>\n

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Good luck!”
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Raymond replied that I really did remind him of this character (Shannon), and that he thought I would like his writing more than Dan Brown’s, which deals with similar “Bible vs. Science” subject matter, as he put it.<\/p>\n

<\/span>This was back in February. It took a while for the book to arrive, longer for me to get around to starting it, a while longer before I picked it up and started again having given up the first time, and even longer until I managed to get all the way through it.<\/p>\n

Raymond, if you’re still reading, I’m sorry. I really wanted to like your book, and it did have some very interesting subject matter. Not only that but you are clearly a good writer who has done lots of research. I hope you find the following review constructive because I think you’re on to a good core idea here (and I have a huge amount of respect for anyone who can actually write and market a novel), but the execution needs a lot of work.<\/p>\n

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Let’s start with Shannon. She is one of three main characters, and one half of a pair of polar opposites. She is a biotechnology student from a strict Catholic background and an extreme atheist, to the extent that she is unwilling to even look at a bible*. <\/span><\/span><\/div>\n


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John, on the other hand, is a committed Christian who starts the book unwilling to believe in the existence of DNA.<\/p>\n

The other guy in the inevitable love triangle is Dan, the main character and a dotcom millionaire, whose beliefs fall somewhere between John’s and Shannon’s.<\/p>\n

To solve the book’s core mystery – does the bible describe DNA and human heredity? – the three friends have to delve into the nature of DNA, genes, proteins and cells, and the mechanisms of heredity and evolution, not to mention some history and lots of biblical verses and their interpretation. There is a huge amount of information that the readers need to know in order to make sense of the story. The major problem I have with Coils of the Serpent <\/em>is how this information transfer is handled.<\/p>\n

Now, the writing of this review was prompted in part by a couple of recent posts by Jenny Rohn over at Nature Network. <\/span>Jenny’s first novel is about to come out, and she has been blogging about how she integrates real science into a fiction setting. (See “in which I take lessons from Scotty”<\/a> and “in which fact infiltrates fiction”<\/a> – there may be more posts to come in this series). Jenny has some excellent advice that I think would really help the author to rework Coils of the Serpent<\/em>. (It is currently a Print on Demand <\/a>book, so a version 2.0 would definitely be possible).<\/p>\n

Most chapters in the current version of the book are taken up with massive information dumps. The three friends take it in turns to inform each other, and hence the reader, about big chunks of biology, or theology, or history. The dialogue is therefore stilted and unrealistic. Nobody talks like this in real life: in complete paragraphs, with amazingly detailed information at their finger tips and with every conversation coming across as a lecture. <\/span><\/div>\n


<\/span>I think the author realised this, because he made a point of varying the settings in which these lectures take place. The friends meet in a coffee shop, then a university museum (I thought this chapter worked quite well), then a pancake house, then a park, someone’s house, the coffee shop again, and someone else’s house. However the detailed descriptions of the settings and furniture don’t quite compensate for the huge chunks of undigested information that made this book such a long hard slog.
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There is also some character background and a secondary storyline, with a bit more action, interspersed with the information dump chapters. This other plot comes as a welcome relief, but its eventual merging with the main storyline into a commando-style raid on a military facility was a bit ridiculous, especially considering the tone and pace of the preceding chapters. (But don’t worry, there a few lecture chapters still to come!).<\/span><\/p>\n

Like I said, the subject matter was interesting enough to keep me struggling through to the end. Some of the matches between the bible and aspects of biology were a pretty big stretch though. For example, any occurrence of the numbers 3 or 4 in the bible must obviously be a reference to the triplet code that translates DNA sequence into protein sequence, or the 4 constituent bases of DNA, respectively. At one point 7 somethings in the bible (deadly sins maybe? I can’t remember) were matched to 3 + 4 = 7 = intelligent design ZOMG!!11!, and I confess that I rolled my eyes.<\/span><\/div>\n
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With one big exception (see below), the scientific content of the novel was pretty accurate. Despite my lack of familiarity with some of the historical and biblical references that make up the rest of the book, I therefore tended to trust the author’s descriptions of them. But maybe not his interpretation. Yup, you’ll no doubt be shocked<\/em> to hear that I don’t buy the overall premise: that unnamed intelligent designers inserted coded references to the nature of DNA, sexual reproduction and human heredity into the bible and other religious texts. But you have to admit that it’s an interesting idea for a novel.
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Now about that big exception…<\/span><\/div>\n


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EVOLUTION!<\/span>
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(What else would you expect from me?!).
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I don’t know if the following reflects the author’s own views**, or if it was included out of necessity to the plot. At one point about half way through the book, Shannon goes to visit one of her professors to be reassured about her belief in evolution as scientific fact. While he tells her that “there is great truth to any concept of evolution”, he also reels off the following points that I found strangely familiar:
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